历年GRE考试Issue主题范文及评析05
Computers of all shapes and sizes, p.c.’s, laptops, faxes, phones,the list never ends.All considered by our society as great technological advances. Not many would argue that the development of these tools has not advanced our world in some ways. However they certainly seem to be making our world one in which contact with our fellow man is less and less necessary. Though some may be more comfortable not having to engage in direct contact, it is questionable whether this is beneficial to society as a whole. The very least result could in fact be a very lonely world, but it may result in more significant problems.评价 www.examｗ.com
This response is seriously flawed.The analysis of the issue is extremely limited, and there are serious problems in sentence structure.The writer’s position, never clearly stated, seems to be that as a result of technological developments, "contact with our fellow man is less and less necessary."However, the implications of this statement (and others) are never explored or developed.Furthermore, the list of technological advancements does not support or clarify the writer’s already tenuously held position.Each new sentence could serve as a springboard to a thoughtful analysis but instead takes the response further from the apparent premise.
While the essay exhibits a lack of sentence variety and contains some grammatical errors, the language is for the most part controlled.This response did not receive a score of 2 because of a language problem, but because reasoning, analysis, and development are extremely thin and insubstantial.
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