II. Editorial Comments7 l! [ y' j* h2 W6 X% U
编者点评" f% N) P1 v4 o* F, G0 e' G3 Y
1. Original: Furthermore, transportation keeps everything going easily. Revised: Furthermore, transportation keeps everything running smoothly.
' i; Q5 }' T1 m: n# ^- }. n 英语中没有 “going easily” 这种说法。这里作者要表达的意思是“事情进展的比较顺利”,我们可以用 “running smoothly”。请看以下两个例子:- s2 o+ s" Y. x3 i; p8 O6 ?
* Although the car crashed just last week, the mechanic was able to fix it quickly and now it is running smoothly.8 |/ x* M' X7 [
* Although we made some measurement mistakes in our first science experiment, our second one is running smoothly.
+ d/ I7 w0 ]* @ 2. Original: Building a shopping center near where we live may have lots of existent and potential advantages. They go as follows./ U6 L% f9 H+ M; J- y) d9 Z* ]1 U
Revised: Building a shopping center where we live has a lot of potential advantages, such as the following.4 y1 R& Z5 o9 r& J( E# y. ^# m. J
为了逻辑通顺和语言联贯,由such as 或者 as follows引导的所要列举的一系列事情,应当作为整行句子的一部分,不可以分开为两个句子。以下是几种常用的表示列举的结构:, C: p0 E9 P, b8 z, c
* After we moved into our new apartment, I had to buy many new household goods, such as the following: toilet paper, cooking utensils, cleaning supplies, etc.
. Y7 U$ X* Q9 q1 c7 W5 H * I am in full support of the new legislation for the following reasons.
" s9 v) P3 V% _- V * My reasons for studying abroad are as follows./ S! C5 L& S- H* ]
* My objections to your decision are listed below.
; g9 ^' F9 U- Q: i6 ` 3. Original: If it is up to me to decide whether a shopping center should be built near my apartment, I prefer to build it. Revised: If it were up to me to decide whether or not to build a shopping center near my apartment, I would decide to build it.
5 L( N! r, O7 V+ O 请注意,在这里由if引导的从句要用虚拟语气,表示与事实相反的动作或状态。例如:
% }% j. m; s' d1 J* a/ A If I were a magician, I would not need to study in order to get a perfect score on the TOEFL.
5 q0 f8 M# ]% j4 G1 g0 n 通常在“if”、“as if ”、 “as though”、 “lest”、“unless”、 “except”、“until”等等引导的从句中,也要用虚拟语态。例如:
7 b7 N7 P d' F If there were no honey, the flowers and the bees would have never met. |