GRE考试：issue官方范文(二)9
评价This is a seriously flawed response to the topic because the reasoning is weak and the ideas are unclear.
The writer's position on the issue seems clear enough, but the essay presents few reasons to support that position.
And even those reasons are not explained clearly.
For example, the writer often refers to the means by which the media influence society (e.g., "such a way," "the nature by which," and "the way in which") but fails to explain what those ideas mean or why they are important.
The reasoning is both seriously limited and unclear.
Problems in word choice frequently trip up the reader.
For example, "our society as a whole fuels the fire to which the media thrives on" is an interesting idea, but the reader has to hesitate at the intrusive "to which."
The same is true of this statement: "the media is able to create any senses of values adaptable by our society."
Also, many basic errors occur throughout the essay: subject-verb agreement (first and last paragraphs), comma splice (third paragraph), "medias'" for "media's" (third paragraph), and "it's" for "its" (last paragraph).
Both the lack of clear reasons and the poor use of language keep this essay at the 2 score level.
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The media is important and there are commercials for business reasons and news and entertainment.
For media to become mainstream, it must appeal to many people. The values expressed must be attractive to the audience, otherwise it will not sell. Example of specific media - Televison:
Television rates each show by the number of viewers.
Shows that do not have a large audience are usually cancelled and then they can allow time for a new show.
Successful shows are duplicated.
For example, Star Trek was successful so it is the creation of many new Star Trek shows (Deep Space Nine, Voyager).
Veiwers decide which shows stay or leave.
What makes a successful or unsuccessful show?
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