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This is a seriously flawed response to the topic because the reasoning is weak and the ideas are unclear.2 z; W8 O4 K; Q- y% u% y$ U( P
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The writer's position on the issue seems clear enough, but the essay presents few reasons to support that position.1 v% c9 I- @# v$ a
F/ U/ Y" F9 V5 ?. M And even those reasons are not explained clearly.
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5 A( j0 E, s* }/ \% X# k0 w" s2 q For example, the writer often refers to the means by which the media influence society (e.g., "such a way," "the nature by which," and "the way in which") but fails to explain what those ideas mean or why they are important.4 j1 z# {" M! v' b
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The reasoning is both seriously limited and unclear.) Z; D5 K; _: B& s8 q
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Problems in word choice frequently trip up the reader.( c7 s5 Y1 M7 h0 L4 R3 J) ?
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For example, "our society as a whole fuels the fire to which the media thrives on" is an interesting idea, but the reader has to hesitate at the intrusive "to which."
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0 P# z. v& b6 t# _, [ The same is true of this statement: "the media is able to create any senses of values adaptable by our society."
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Also, many basic errors occur throughout the essay: subject-verb agreement (first and last paragraphs), comma splice (third paragraph), "medias'" for "media's" (third paragraph), and "it's" for "its" (last paragraph).
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Both the lack of clear reasons and the poor use of language keep this essay at the 2 score level." z" M) I; W4 g. O$ ~+ X2 f2 Z
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The media is important and there are commercials for business reasons and news and entertainment.* X' t( g% V8 w: {% U
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For media to become mainstream, it must appeal to many people. The values expressed must be attractive to the audience, otherwise it will not sell. Example of specific media - Televison:
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Television rates each show by the number of viewers.
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3 Q' c& W$ ]0 |; f( | Shows that do not have a large audience are usually cancelled and then they can allow time for a new show.* @* d5 K" k. k9 u+ x
: `0 a+ }; Z$ ^( {: n% o2 {- u* n- E Successful shows are duplicated.
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Veiwers decide which shows stay or leave.
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发表于 2012-8-15 12:52:21
