专四专八高分文章秘诀:使英文作文句子多样化（2）

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　　　增强英语语句表现力的有效方法
　　一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
9 l. j3 k+ J5 }' j　　1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：
% U) K: s" t, I. t, C　　Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
7 i0 ^& b1 b/ y. |5 o% C1 g　　Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form. a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
& Q3 Y  U2 z' y5 ^5 t% z0 b　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
& ]6 g( v* i% X　　2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：
　　1) Weak: The team members are good players.
　　Revision: The team members play well.
0 l8 }; |0 h1 a9 {　　2) Weak: One worker’s plan is the elimination of tardiness.
5 V* G6 F9 Z3 ^( o5 x( ^　　Revision: One worker’s plan eliminates tardiness.
　　3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如：
# a" I) @3 J2 R7 A2 Y( L　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.
　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
6 c4 s5 `  x3 d8 y8 s　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.
　　二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
& Q" M4 I; U/ s; k$ K: E9 {1 G& j& ]# b　　1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.
　　Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
　　2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.
! m# O# z5 L5 J5 ]* C2 [3 i7 p　　Better: She compares prices and quality.
/ w2 @$ Q% A/ Q9 ?5 N- W　　三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
　　1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
　　Better: Charity has supported the organization.
3 Y; x- A9 j6 v. X+ [3 O) Z　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
% R! H5 ?4 _- X& Z' \* D　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
　　四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
　　1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
8 H. G3 z! B! c) K8 C5 E1 y3 `　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
* f5 Y$ u6 _6 y/ k* C; S　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
, O6 b, B$ N% D, g; E. o$ d0 Q* u, o- a　　五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
% A5 k- }( Y9 `　　1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
　　2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
' n( f( [9 }  B* {, s　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
* O( I! T' }1 ^3 n7 t0 p2 I* x2 |8 L　　一篇好文章的条件很多。除了内容丰富和组织紧密之外，词汇的运用和句子的处理，也起着决定性作用。句子可长可短，同一件事，可以用不同的句式表达。如果句子清一色是简单句，文章必定很单调乏味。如果全篇充满了冗长的复杂句，读起来也很费力。
　　词汇的包装是个较为艰巨的过程，但单从应试的角度而言，考生可以精选一些高分作文学习，吸取其中的语言营养，对其中的用词进行细致的研究和模仿，在练习时尽量使用范文中一些常用的优秀词汇。