专四专八高分文章秘诀:使英文作文句子多样化（2）

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　　　增强英语语句表现力的有效方法
　　一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
2 d  V  Y9 t* T1 e' m& M- c8 w$ m6 ?9 U　　1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：
3 D1 A  i8 Q) a3 S, v　　Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
6 a/ u( ]% c# D0 \# S8 U4 u/ l　　Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form. a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
　　2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：
　　1) Weak: The team members are good players.
　　Revision: The team members play well.
5 [3 o5 A! j; P1 D, X- L　　2) Weak: One worker’s plan is the elimination of tardiness.
. v! l+ C: I2 u  z　　Revision: One worker’s plan eliminates tardiness.
　　3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如：
- K; H0 B! X7 H) C# L9 b$ X$ j　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.
　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.
1 m& F; R( [; n; ?　　二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
　　1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.
　　Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
+ r8 A( K6 V1 j1 @　　2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.
　　Better: She compares prices and quality.
9 `. U& |, t6 q: z  R/ Z, q" k　　三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
* T5 O0 Q& u9 o/ _" y, n　　1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
% K* Z( z$ ^. U. H. S; c　　Better: Charity has supported the organization.
  x! Q: N  I, F1 B4 f+ ~5 N, b9 I　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
7 j8 e+ d7 I& Q7 J9 {# c　　四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
　　1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
1 R0 k; |$ a/ s- c　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
* [  D& _2 c! O5 e8 R/ h. A% k　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
　　五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
; j' [* \& J1 h- y　　1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
- n  s" J4 R$ F1 E! ^8 }　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
4 ?1 _: e9 K$ ]　　2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
( x, A2 w1 W- C' n4 o$ V$ k+ X　　一篇好文章的条件很多。除了内容丰富和组织紧密之外，词汇的运用和句子的处理，也起着决定性作用。句子可长可短，同一件事，可以用不同的句式表达。如果句子清一色是简单句，文章必定很单调乏味。如果全篇充满了冗长的复杂句，读起来也很费力。
8 h) f1 Z( ~* O9 s　　词汇的包装是个较为艰巨的过程，但单从应试的角度而言，考生可以精选一些高分作文学习，吸取其中的语言营养，对其中的用词进行细致的研究和模仿，在练习时尽量使用范文中一些常用的优秀词汇。