Essay examinations are a fact of college life.
8 ~6 j$ }$ B5 v. q# { You may have taken it to enter your present college, __1__
" e' w! A, K& b* ^1 p to get into an English class,or as requirement__2__
; J# o B) T/ v8 v1 \ in one of your other college courses. Whether they) N l0 N( a; Y) ^/ v5 U
are whole papers written in class and test questions__3__
/ U% f4 k1 h; g% F that require a paragraph response, but essay__4__( j2 R, K7 ^7 v
examinations offer you with the opportunity to express__5__+ U2 z& Z5 M6 z7 x! R+ T
your mastery of a subject--to apply, synthesis,__6__4 Y% J _& h6 G# }* B" u
compare, or describe ideas from your own perspective.- p6 i/ g$ E4 c& Y5 p' V
They represent a chance for you to demonstrate: O; a5 i& t' Z) b; I# n& |3 [0 T; |
not only your collection of facts and details,__7__
3 ]8 ]4 ~% K) f% F but also your completely understanding of how all__8__
' z, l9 Y1 M* }1 t+ I the parts of a topic fit together. Your audience here
# j: P- F; C& o7 z" |: V$ g( Y$ S is just one person--your instructor--for whom you__9__" _$ M4 w8 s( n6 u6 q+ ~" y, q( [
must demonstrate your understanding and applying__10__8 V) m$ V* Y5 O2 S$ X
of the course material.
* h+ u: W7 a: k& N% T 答案：3 Y( T- ]1 o8 X h. X, j
1.it改为one
# d2 `+ ~: w/ F( q0 D 这里需要的代词应理解为“这样的一个考试”，而不是“这个考试”；另外，it的形式与上文的examination不符+ X2 n/ D/ p' L. A% f
2. as后加冠词a; Z& _! f3 L5 u, g5 V* D# c! Y
表示“一个要求”
( M9 Y# x7 l, j9 X 3. and改为or+ x$ ?# Q. G" Z
应组成“whether...or...”结构* \5 @9 t2 X# `. ]8 R7 _
4. 去掉but" ~6 c0 B6 g5 t* c# i& Z. _
whether开头的句子是一个主从复合句，所以主句前不加连词but
$ _; ^+ W& a/ A' l2 f* [ U8 b 5. 去掉with或将offer改为provide, Y0 C' r6 g, {
offer是及物动词，可跟双宾语
! k3 |6 f6 G! e. O: _, _: _ 6.synthesis改为synthesize! W; N; t3 X4 R/ `; s4 Q
这里的平行结构除了synthesis之外都是名词，所以需要改为动词形式2 I: L B$ o, A! K( T
7. collection改为recollection
, K* z) H |/ H4 S, u/ y8 q 这里不表示“收集”，而是“有关事实和细节的会议”
3 m+ n |5 i3 n. V( O# @ 8.completely改为complete2 N# w/ l( D7 ?9 F$ H
被修饰词understanding是动名词，所以应用形容词来修饰' R+ s y5 T- j' F3 k. m8 p4 |+ {
9.for改为to
6 H# T$ b% R. `2 V' k. u4 f& Z “for whom”言下之意是“为了指导老师来展示....”，而“to whom”是“展示给老师看”
% G# v* U P( N: @2 |/ u; \ 10.applying改为application
# q! h: m N' ^ 如果一个词本身有名词形式，尽量不要使用动名词 |
发表于 2012-8-14 11:29:10
