Essay examinations are a fact of college life.& I0 U4 ?9 l# P% D6 l& i' K! ]
You may have taken it to enter your present college, __1__$ b. U+ U% c: o
to get into an English class,or as requirement__2__
( J C. w7 {1 \ in one of your other college courses. Whether they2 h3 _0 m m3 J2 B* s, L) E
are whole papers written in class and test questions__3__
' d+ |# h8 y- G+ [' p0 q8 h* ^ d that require a paragraph response, but essay__4__$ Q- o& k" w- C1 `* F$ H3 j
examinations offer you with the opportunity to express__5__8 h: C( S9 Y9 l/ Y7 E+ {% G) y
your mastery of a subject--to apply, synthesis,__6__- |/ s/ T' D$ b9 W9 }) s- y
compare, or describe ideas from your own perspective.* H5 `( S* J4 z' [9 b
They represent a chance for you to demonstrate& Q% u, L; a# f3 R6 H* M
not only your collection of facts and details,__7__! G( I+ T% [2 O5 ^5 M" T! S: F, ?
but also your completely understanding of how all__8__' \5 o3 p% r" n! N; i5 M
the parts of a topic fit together. Your audience here0 x; F) X* H A. B
is just one person--your instructor--for whom you__9__
' u' w( a& i* [4 t# A must demonstrate your understanding and applying__10__
2 h" d& {$ R3 L5 f3 N+ i; O of the course material.1 C- Q$ R" v; z* t
答案：8 ^% g* J5 O+ R2 X7 L. _8 s
1.it改为one* S1 c* T- m) s+ @% p% `8 L! i
这里需要的代词应理解为“这样的一个考试”，而不是“这个考试”；另外，it的形式与上文的examination不符
7 E- t! F5 X4 A2 y0 s; C7 ^ 2. as后加冠词a$ e0 `2 S- g Z. |
表示“一个要求”
7 q8 w6 d8 Q. P1 U- `) i 3. and改为or' n1 Q3 t1 p' C/ W% i# {
应组成“whether...or...”结构
7 r' J& F6 a2 n% G. G5 Q 4. 去掉but5 g- j6 d% w) Y6 m3 E0 {
whether开头的句子是一个主从复合句，所以主句前不加连词but
5 m* T6 p. |( R" X) X9 t 5. 去掉with或将offer改为provide
2 s1 t0 m: D. o7 F% I offer是及物动词，可跟双宾语
2 P& X4 h i6 V$ w/ M& y( }) h. z 6.synthesis改为synthesize
) a9 ]4 v4 J' g n4 N) ` 这里的平行结构除了synthesis之外都是名词，所以需要改为动词形式
% B6 g8 }' m% c, V 7. collection改为recollection7 ] i0 U1 U6 I6 [1 _
这里不表示“收集”，而是“有关事实和细节的会议”
/ A5 P8 S. c& S# k" u s 8.completely改为complete
9 M5 t! y) [+ a 被修饰词understanding是动名词，所以应用形容词来修饰5 q+ m5 l5 W ~0 T2 a- x
9.for改为to
; E% D7 r- `+ T4 @ “for whom”言下之意是“为了指导老师来展示....”，而“to whom”是“展示给老师看”
- Y0 ]( s0 n0 f& J 10.applying改为application2 q- P; u- C8 G) v9 `
如果一个词本身有名词形式，尽量不要使用动名词 |
发表于 2012-8-14 11:29:10
