二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
8 S* R5 X, H7 R2 x# Y/ W5 r4 C 1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.5 t$ I( f Z( i9 u& D0 _7 E
Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
" A( y4 ?' T5 K7 L# F8 n* n* u 2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.% N" |8 E8 u. }. |' C
Better: She compares prices and quality.1 m6 A' k. n8 C7 k& T' i t
三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
0 C/ y: L9 \" r& ^ 1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity., [$ ^: l) {7 o8 ], D6 \, Q
Better: Charity has supported the organization.* d5 @2 t2 e7 d1 c, W4 n$ \2 q) t" J
2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
. x' d, N. ]$ M; D Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.5 [: h& f; r4 ^. u
四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：* C- y/ `* Q( Y+ K; z* P! K
1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
1 }& [6 f. c2 X( O9 o6 W Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.9 C2 |6 j2 ~+ z0 x
2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.% e2 a2 I2 y r
Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
, @9 W! M9 U" D/ c2 y+ U7 Z% h 3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
* A2 u) x3 {! Q" H Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.- M3 H% y$ x1 U
4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.% z5 g* B# ] W2 v
Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
$ j4 g% Q K' K- G+ T# N% j2 Z 五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
3 ?- g! ^/ w; z, ^" d( D" l 1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
3 g6 W9 w% w1 b Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
: {( L4 C2 u9 I* r! m$ q: }3 ?" | 2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall." U/ L% C4 f. b3 w" f" s3 i
Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall. |
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