专八写作怎样使句子多样化（2）

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　　二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
　　1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.
7 L" P) \2 Z9 _0 G* y' c% _6 Q　　Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
　　2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.
4 F+ ^+ ~* K8 d4 x+ K- g　　Better: She compares prices and quality.
　　三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
　　1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
: K  s! @( O2 q' @  u　　Better: Charity has supported the organization.
; s9 O' r# a5 N* u& J　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
- r& |' Y* B( s+ e7 z7 N　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
　　四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
　　1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
$ J5 y/ o% T; M  B　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
6 J! ?( q2 D2 Q, D　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
' ^) A. L& l& h8 O. d7 }　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
3 Z1 |' H- d8 a" G, `/ M　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
6 t( y4 Z7 X1 q% d  e　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
　　五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
' {) x3 C& z' \1 ~0 \　　1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
  [1 E0 n; D" n% ?, W1 }9 b　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
　　2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
' r! t* z! s4 B* v* |  W. W$ u& p　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.