英语专业八级考试写作句子多样化2

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增强英语语句表现力的有效方法
5 ?# _# M  W+ w/ K  r　一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
　　1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：
　　Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
7 q' |1 L( o. c1 l1 s. u　　Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定 语)
　　2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：
/ o  \- W% j/ D9 o" G　　1) Weak: The team members are good players.
* j3 z8 T" i- s4 C$ J6 K4 s) @　　Revision: The team members play well.
　　2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.
　　Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
6 \& I3 c1 O: S/ S* ~- A% d+ Z　　3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例 如：
4 @2 p8 q. e( M　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.
　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
- g3 u( u5 U# j$ |5 z$ S　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
2 X: w$ H4 P) |" @" i6 r' o　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.
二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
3 {$ |2 H+ K# w3 E% W) S　　1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.
　　Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
: w' z% [- @+ P　　2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.
3 J0 N3 V$ Q/ G" K　　Better: She compares prices and quality.
' {. \* w8 k4 C  P. Y, N! t$ \/ |三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
　　1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
( u6 D" |9 C: x! H2 \　　Better: Charity has supported the organization.
8 Z" I( c. M: G4 l/ p　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
　　1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
$ p+ Y9 h2 {% W. T$ @1 M# e　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
9 T0 `! F4 p! O; A6 V4 W　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
* T2 {4 n$ \& O0 z2 _& t　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
1 y* i# i9 ~/ `8 G' c: h- b4 C　　1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
/ [2 r. Z! D  r2 w) h$ R3 n- |　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
　　2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.