英语专业八级考试写作句子多样化2

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增强英语语句表现力的有效方法
0 j- r2 J. F. a　一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
　　1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：
4 T1 Z, a+ O1 b& g$ T　　Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
　　Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
) M- P  T0 H. P& G, `* l) ^6 e　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定 语)
0 A% k5 N$ @9 e" O' n　　2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：
3 X& g2 Z# E8 |* C/ }; k　　1) Weak: The team members are good players.
　　Revision: The team members play well.
! E6 B( N) i: o: }) K, H　　2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.
　　Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
+ @2 u" l) R3 l, B( v! ^　　3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例 如：
　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.
" I" ]2 F1 |. p' c9 \- S　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
, [8 O$ Q7 C9 q: `　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
, J0 A* j0 I# A' ~* _　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.
1 V4 r3 q1 S: j  s二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
　　1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.
" S& }( {8 N+ G　　Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
　　2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.
! H, W# C; c/ D( ^　　Better: She compares prices and quality.
三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
　　1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
　　Better: Charity has supported the organization.
　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
- d+ K) B( U+ [$ N8 w四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
' I6 d% D- |# }/ f　　1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
8 n6 V5 }+ D; I7 t, v: o　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
( d' ^9 j3 Z0 y" C& p/ x　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
6 U; @3 B7 K9 q6 Y　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
8 |- M7 Z/ q1 Z4 ?5 A3 H/ c　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
7 e" s& P4 ]$ t9 a; P% O$ Z0 y" e: [五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
　　1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
. t( k! i4 Q+ I- W. @% N　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
" x; O& m3 m0 r) v! [. y1 [　　2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
3 {0 `, g8 }$ m1 O* ?/ \, I* |7 Y　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.