初级商务英语写作：Formulate

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　　本期作文题目：
" a$ p9 [5 A! |) [( O( F: J- [6 g9 j　　Formulate a smoking policy for your office which is fair to both smokers and nonsmokers. Write a 40-50 word memo informing all staff of the policy.
　　提示：
# T* D: |- {4 v$ d, D1 ?$ k1 X# `( I　　我们需要确定，如果我是公司职员，我要在这篇memo中获得什么信息?是不是要知道：
　　1.新的吸烟政策从什么时候开始;
　　2.吸烟区划定在什么地方?
1 K5 I; V" F9 {7 I( O& B　　网友作文一：
　　TO: All Employees
　　FROM: CEO, Willan Smith
　　SUBJECT: NEW SMOKING POLICY
　　For all the employees, especially smokers,[1] plz be aware that our company's new smoking policy has been formulated as follow: A main smoking area's going to be restricted before Next MONDAY[2], anyone is not allowed to smoker in non-smoking zone even in the washing room.[3]Plz target the smoking and non-moking area and stick to the company's new policy.[4]Thx.
　　名师指导：
5 ?3 @2 d1 a) o# _4 R; u　　[1]去掉，抬头已经写过给所有的员工，所以直接从正文开始就行了，费这个事干什么?
　　[2]时间不确切，最好是 from next Monday. Before 这个期限是什么时候?如果不能给出确切信息，就不要说，还不如换成具体的吸烟区域更好: be restricted to the room next to the toilet.
　　[3]你经常在洗手间吸烟吗?或者你们公司有这样的同事?把这句话去掉。
- F$ u1 Y5 P+ _; ?+ K　　[4]添加：to ensure that it is fair to all of you.
　　网友作文二：
　　To: All staff
( i; `9 C3 O, I7 X" \% {3 P# i) T: W　　From: Hope0068
　　Everybody know that smoking is dangerous for your health. And the The studies didn't just point to the ill effects of smoking on those who smoke--non-smokers, too. [1] Notice is hereby given that the smoking area is located in the special corner[2] of the first floor of this building. This come into force on[3] September 15th.Thanks.
　　名师指导：
　　[1]Memo 的主要作用就是提醒同事们注意事项，这和吸烟有多有害不相干，去掉。改为：to assure working environment
　　[2]一般的公司都应该给个room
　　[3]from　　网友作文三：
' n# B+ Y& S/ N　　memorandum
　　to : all the staff
( `& K" T- F5 Q8 U　　from : jeremy
* F0 L. k+ C8 F　　subjuect : new somking policy
　　do you have a feeling that our office is surrounding by smog all the day, [1]so we will implemented a[2] new policy for somking ,from next week[3] ,we will open an area[4] for the smoking ,and other area is rescricting to smoke ,also there is a punishment when we find you smoke in these area [5]thank you
　　名师指导：
+ ]4 L7 M+ @/ W* H. p0 w8 u　　[1]去掉来
　　[2]we will implement a
　　[3]Next Monday
　　[4]在哪里啊?
- C, h6 e# d' e9 N  s" ~　　[5]关于惩罚，最好不提。
+ C+ @: d3 ]- J, J6 X/ |- i4 c　　网友作文四：
　　to: All Staff
% @' X" y) y7 X7 E7 [* u　　from: Susuan Wu
　　To creat a nonsmoking office room, we hope that smoking is forbidden in the work office from Sep.1st. Would you please enjoy your smoking in the Launch by closing the office door.
! j# J8 h2 p7 F　　Thank you for your coperation.
7 H- G; ]: B# R. u3 M+ o　　名师指导：
　　整体很干脆，但是语气比较客气，而且没有看出是公司新政策的实行啊!
　　网友作文五：
: W3 {. r8 u& w5 I, ]　　To: All staff
' \3 ~* t6 o* m7 }　　From: Sarah Buffay
) F1 s- E# l: A( G! Y( n　　As you all know, there is an increasing dispute about smoking in the office. Now we'd like to formulate a policy both fair to smokers and nonsmokers: The vacant room 408 will be opened as "Smoking Room" from tomorrow. All smokers may go there within the time limitation from 9:00a.m. to 4:00p.m. But smokers are not allowed to smoke outside this room.[1]If you have any problems, please contact me. [2]
0 Q9 u8 r: O. Y& ~　　名师指导：
　　[1]去掉。
$ d0 A- m: z, G& {/ E　　[2]这是信件的结尾，不是memo的，直接用 thank you 就可以。