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[托福写作] 考生写作必备:常见病句分析(一)

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发表于 2012-8-14 23:46:10 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
1. The artist’s work pushes our civilization to a higher level.  ( p9 e! b$ ]3 w1 Y/ G1 i7 f
改进:Artists’ work upgrades our civilization.  5 W8 [0 s! v1 U/ _8 ?
2. For example, you work in a big factory.  ( t; `* y& u3 `: _: W6 M1 _
改进: Suppose you work in a big factory.  
+ w( k( l4 \# V+ Q3. You’ll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.  7 K1 \' i' c" a/ _" _
改进:You’ll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.  % n0 ?! W; d8 S: \/ J
4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.  ; |7 K2 j  F  m8 g0 a: X9 Y
改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.  
! P3 x( ?" t3 Y* C! M8 L5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.  / _* I5 j2 q$ u
改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life.  
' x: m: E- P" W) H; R! K6. Their brain is still very young.  
" B. ]6 z, y& r6 W9 g8 @改进: They are still immature.  
# I& m/ F" ^- Y7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.  
& q, Q% Z3 R- u8 C改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.  - d6 L4 s" p& |4 Z, x; c
8. They can’t analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.  
$ O# l1 B( I# ^8 s' Q$ f改进: They cannot tell right from wrong.  
' J8 {$ @9 i  O9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.  3 |' l; p6 g& Y& S1 K3 C
改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time.  $ w7 A; T  Y& {$ A. D& D5 M' ?
10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.
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