1. I am not good at maths, but English 改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.3 O% x4 O, Q* s$ ^& U
2. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children’s leisure time?
& f8 d2 W. g& ^# r 改进: Who is the proper person to plan children’s leisure time?
! k' d8 Q2 D6 M* B, T 3.It is children who clear about their interests.* y8 ]0 ]# F0 c4 |2 I. Q4 @
改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.中 华 考 试 网0 `3 n' |) {/ l' p6 p$ Q! K4 F7 b
4. I agree the latter idea.(漏掉介词是大家在托福写作中低分的常见病句。)
1 T$ T# Z5 \7 t' F) B% F. E 改进: I agree with the latter idea.9 n# F! T Q+ y5 ^8 ^* M! v0 w
5. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
2 h; e# N9 f& d; B# E 改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.- r9 w* [# p. }. \+ V: p4 l/ z
6. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.7 g# K9 a2 y, }& t: j+ s U! u+ e
改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
( z9 i( Y% e3 o& O 7. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.(语义重复也是大家在托福写作中导致低分的主要原因)1 n2 P. i* N" {+ ~
改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
9 _$ @9 Q/ \1 a# b, N ? 8. No one knows all the things.
1 H: m( g4 r9 H: b3 n+ h# l$ i6 k 改进: No one knows everything.
/ a1 P; ?0 G( y6 ?7 d3 t 9. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.2 `8 Z: _+ a* R
改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
0 s4 |3 u- k% V) Z3 D0 L5 n( {! @ 10. Each form of shavings friends has its advantages." x+ C, N5 M& x3 }
改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages. |
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