1. I am not good at maths, but English 改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.3 E) e! c7 s8 C0 F% D7 f# V2 D
2. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children’s leisure time?
* S* c, R+ P3 ^( O! ^* d5 } 改进: Who is the proper person to plan children’s leisure time?+ U2 x1 q4 h: k) V* h$ j
3.It is children who clear about their interests.% b& _# x" O2 M9 x/ J
改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.中 华 考 试 网
8 h- }( N9 U0 p: | 4. I agree the latter idea.(漏掉介词是大家在托福写作中低分的常见病句。)
U2 E% {6 a) ~ 改进: I agree with the latter idea.
0 E! c9 x7 E, ^$ z9 X0 B 5. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
6 Q2 ?9 @ u& W6 N$ X 改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
5 a, q2 O k& J& t& i 6. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.& o9 l( t9 f$ y- ^5 X
改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.. J: I: ?8 o% P* Y% Q/ r* y
7. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.(语义重复也是大家在托福写作中导致低分的主要原因)
! ^ i2 S2 Z1 s# K7 |' S H: a7 @: s 改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.' D& h% A0 W9 j3 |6 V
8. No one knows all the things. I0 R4 {& V& o6 H$ U& `
改进: No one knows everything.# ?0 J% ~. |& N% H9 J
9. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life., y* L# G! z2 ?# E, M5 w6 H3 N' d
改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
. C/ W$ G. Y! E5 t ] 10. Each form of shavings friends has its advantages.
" t5 H4 n$ t H+ P 改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages. |
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