1. I am not good at maths, but English 改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English. $ u1 I; e5 g: V, N; L- D) M! ~ 2. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children’s leisure time? ) h; }1 B& U; t+ ?5 \ 改进: Who is the proper person to plan children’s leisure time? ; c: e/ v! j9 u. M 3.It is children who clear about their interests. m* k w* }0 P- @9 c. U% R
改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.中 华 考 试 网) V7 Z) N5 O( q. z5 p2 w
4. I agree the latter idea.(漏掉介词是大家在托福写作中低分的常见病句。) 0 j/ A3 B1 Z4 |- _: w% d 改进: I agree with the latter idea.6 l J! M$ N* B* k+ S7 D/ v+ L. T
5. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo., d& C2 c" D7 b7 g8 w f
改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.. {; l& z3 T3 p# ^9 ]
6. So I feel breathe more comfortably now. ' N/ w# c- s" a& I 改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe. 8 u1 a9 O# R! y) D* Z! n5 D 7. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.(语义重复也是大家在托福写作中导致低分的主要原因)$ t- S; W% z) g: |4 T
改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.( U4 O3 U9 t) C9 b
8. No one knows all the things.7 q0 Q2 q0 y4 W% E+ s9 h
改进: No one knows everything.: B) L- `7 S; q
9. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.9 s- s2 a2 J. F. x1 ^& C( s
改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life. 2 |8 j9 p+ q0 h! E5 ~- x 10. Each form of shavings friends has its advantages.6 n" D; @# c! P! l( P( ]& t2 R# u2 b
改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
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