1. I am not good at maths, but English 改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.+ w( M, q N, M- ]9 R, ~
2. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children’s leisure time?
! Q0 j2 _" @) v) N, p/ C 改进: Who is the proper person to plan children’s leisure time?
* l! J! p6 D- a- Q 3.It is children who clear about their interests.
8 {1 ]2 t6 H$ n' n: g5 h& M 改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.中 华 考 试 网& V* Y* R! b! A4 i" a/ v3 r
4. I agree the latter idea.(漏掉介词是大家在托福写作中低分的常见病句。)
( j7 X. h6 S' T, i( D6 h9 ]3 _5 ~0 T 改进: I agree with the latter idea.8 z2 G5 w& f# G+ X
5. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
4 U4 x2 [7 r/ R0 ^- z A 改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
1 u. f* M$ b* ?* }4 |- Q& X! g- A 6. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.' J* t* n4 N% C$ S" [0 P
改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
0 X* j" w% y, N5 \6 k9 w& j. P 7. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.(语义重复也是大家在托福写作中导致低分的主要原因)
9 u) m( B G, o; [( [ 改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.1 R1 c* [, X- C% K: ~, ?. \
8. No one knows all the things.
, H: H* r7 \: I& {( N. r 改进: No one knows everything.
" `. _2 F2 @! e. q 9. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.& p# h2 `3 c3 |. v) n7 Q( m
改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life./ V& B; M0 t( ~% b5 f$ q
10. Each form of shavings friends has its advantages.
9 e, @' v' V4 {4 K/ p3 E4 A 改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages. |
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