新GRE考试Issue主题范文整理（10）
: A1 b8 }6 u2 z* [6 w' J& J) e Reader Commentary for Essay Response — Score 2
0 o6 R n, h" f/ g9 o4 t b The language of this essay is what most clearly links it to the score of 2. Amidst sporadic moments of clarity, this essay is marred by serious errors in grammar, usage and mechanics that often interfere with meaning. It is unclear what the writer means when he/she states, "To be lazy for human in some meaning is one of the fashion issues in thesedays," or "to adapt suit tech to tasks in need."wｗw.ExamＷ.CoM( D D% Z2 ~" \: f/ H
Despite such severe flaws, the writer has made an obvious attempt to respond to the prompt ("I can not agree with the statement that the technology make humans to be reluctant to thinking thoroughly") as well as an unclear attempt to support such an assertion ("Not understanding the aims and theory of them [technology] couses the disapproval problems" and "The most important thing to use the thechnology ... is to comprehend the fundamental idea of them"). On the whole, the essay displays a seriously flawed but not fundamentally deficient attempt to develop and support its claims.
! c s5 |1 A% {. i (Note: In this specific case, the analysis is tied directly to the language. As the language falters, so too does the analysis |
发表于 2012-8-15 12:52:21
