二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：' \% m! S( j/ L+ X; {
1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.5 H. O" L# ?4 C
Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
0 o+ N. F; G) R/ y2 \( i 2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.
6 P* |( m! }* [ Better: She compares prices and quality., [+ n7 P+ L0 o& t
三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
4 L5 A! c$ ~; ^! ?* E4 { q7 r& M% @ 1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
C* ^8 C2 Q K8 c6 x* Z9 s Better: Charity has supported the organization.7 l. L, D/ b. g7 B, H" v* l
2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
( T' p! x2 G9 k# U. X- x8 u2 E/ c Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.4 y+ V3 p2 R9 }$ W/ O/ j$ n) G4 h. [
四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
7 t2 L$ B7 B5 H8 I 1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
1 [# P6 D; e" K2 @0 d Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
( `( N2 V# N7 Z: {" X% p% ]! M 2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
% ?/ q: X8 B( A- H, g$ j$ b# G& \ Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.; `$ X' n& I, Q- b$ h# T) l# c* i2 R
3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
( u. {1 |5 }3 k1 p+ f, O. @ Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.; L( Z% Z3 z" o4 r# q d5 a
4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
& C5 z1 C7 i3 U1 H Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.* z+ `: D, J/ Y( p9 ^8 \& O4 y' N
五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
6 Y2 W; X% h2 M1 Z: R) R 1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.# K8 S4 z3 O+ t! {: w+ V& y
Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.$ B4 H% T% z: v
2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
- n9 w9 u7 M. H Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall. |
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