如何让你的英语作文更有亮点（2）

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　　2.使用一些强势句式，如强调句、感叹句、倒装句等，增强语句的表现力。如：
　　3)阿福救了我妹妹。
7 m' |2 ?6 o  v: e4 F% `6 T　　A: Ah Fu saved my sister.(一般句式)
　　B: It was Ah Fu that saved my sister.(强调句式)
5 S! I/ ^# @# B. {7 ]　　4)我们看到庄稼和蔬菜长势喜人很是高兴。
　　A: We were glad to see crops and vegetables growing well.(一般陈述句)
　　B: How glad we were to see crops and vegetables growing well.(感叹句)
2 ~- c( t  c: I) ^3 L# ]; W　　3、句式多样,复杂得体。在写作中应避免使用相同长度的相同句型，而应注意句式的变化，如长短句结合，简单句、并列句与复合句共用，还可使用简化句等；一些较复杂的结构如独立主格，分词结构等也可使用。下面的表达中A句简单句多，而且多处使用there be结构，显得单调、乏味，而B句就有自己的特色(请同学们自己分析)。
: R0 Q0 \% y* {' Y& U, m　　5)这是一套25平方米的住房，住房里面有卧室、有洗澡间、有厨房；卧室里有床、沙发、桌子和椅子等。
0 q2 ]% h1 s( D9 i. a　　A: It's a flat of 25 square metres. There is a bedroom in the flat. There is a bathroom and a kitchen in it, too. In the bedroom, there is a bed; there is a sofa, a desk and a chair as well.
　　B: It's a flat of 25 square metres, with a bedroom, a bathroom and a kitchen. In the bedroom there is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair.
# N  z# D7 k: ~, h7 m　　三、布局谋篇——独具匠心
　　在写作中，我们可按时间、空间或其它逻辑顺序来安排各要点，同时为使主题突出,结构严谨，我们应注意学习和使用交代句以及段落的主题句等。在布局谋篇上，NMET2002范文堪称典范。请看：
　　Opinions are divided on the question.
1 G7 c: S* s2 R( c' G  `4 M, y3 b　　60% of the students are against the idea of entrance fees. They believe a public park should be free of charge. People need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves. Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away. What is more, it will become necessary to build gates and walls, which will do harm to the appearance of a city.
: |) T" ?5 i9 e8 g2 v. V, p; f' e2 x5 t　　On the other hand, 40% think that fees should be charged because you need money to pay gardens and other workers, and to buy plants and young trees. They suggested, however, fees should be charged low.
, E: h0 x: o6 h0 ^4 U# `+ b　　1)该文使用Opinions are divided...作交代句，开门见山，随后两个段落均使用了主题句(见黑体字部分)，使全文结构紧凑，表达严谨。
　　2)在表述要点时范文还对要点出场顺序作了调整，如“40%的同学认为应收门票，但不宜过高。”前部分作为主题句放在句首，而后部分另起一句放在句末：They suggested, however, fees should be charged low.这样就分清了轻重缓急，主题突出，条理清楚。
; y. u9 C2 U2 X# l" F1 O　　3)范文使用了and, what is more, however等连词，在段落之间使用了on the other hand(说明前后两个观点是相悖的)，这些连接手段的运用加强了句子之间、段落之间的联系，使文章表达连贯，浑然一体。
　　4)范文在第二段为说明不收门票的“原因”时增加了Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away.等细节，这也是解决句与句之间缺少连贯性的常见方法。
　　总之，要想使自己的文章有亮点，吸引读者，在考试中获得高分，就应在用词、造句、谋篇上下功夫，哪怕是有一处特长都是“亮”点，都是值得肯定的。