大家来找错之大学专业八级的改错练习34

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　　Our obsession with thinness is also fueled by health concerns.It is true that in this country we have more overweighted people __1__ than ever before, and that, in many cases, being over weight　correlates an increased risk of heart and blood vessel disease. __2__ These diseases, therefore, may have as much to do with our __3__ way of life and our high-fat diets as with excessive weight. And __4__ the associate risk of cancer in the digestive system may be more __5__ about a dietary problem—too much fat and a lack of fiber than a __6__ weight problem.The real concern, then, is not that we weigh too much, but　that we neither exercise enough or eat well. Exercise is necessary __7__ for strong bones and both heart and lung health. A balanced diet
　　without a lot of fat can also help the body avoid many diseases.We should surely stop paying so much attention on weight. __8__ Simply being thin is not enough. It is actually hazardy if those who __9__ get(or already are) thin think they are automatically healthy and thus free from paying attention to their overall life-style. Thinness can be purely vainglory. __10__
　　1.overweighted改为overweight overweight本身就可以做形容词修饰people，不需要加ed。
1 s& l/ w3 n: U0 U* ?1 L: Y  J* w- W　　2.correlates后加with.Correlate应与with连用，表示“A与B有关联”。
3 z8 c" i6 g8 [- G+ |3 G　　3.therefore改为however.从上下文来看，这里是转折而不是因果。
　　4.excessive改为excess.excess往往指数量上超过所需，多余。excessive 往往有不赞同，否定的含义在里面，另外，excessive除了可以表示数量以外还可以表示程度，表达抽象概念。比如After cooking fish, pour off the excess fat.The government says that local authority spending is excessive.
　　5.associate 改为associated.associated 表示“关联的，相关的”。
　　6.about改为of.这里的意思是“与之相关的消化系统患癌症的危险实际上是饮食问题引起的，而非体重问题” ，about意思为“相关的”，这里应该为of，表性质。
　　7.or改为nor.neither应和nor连用表示两者皆否定，而not才和or连用。
　　8.on改为to
　　9.hazardy改为hazardous.hazard的形容词是hazardous而不是hazardy。
　　10.purely改为pure