大家来找错之大学专业八级的改错练习34

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　　Our obsession with thinness is also fueled by health concerns.It is true that in this country we have more overweighted people __1__ than ever before, and that, in many cases, being over weight　correlates an increased risk of heart and blood vessel disease. __2__ These diseases, therefore, may have as much to do with our __3__ way of life and our high-fat diets as with excessive weight. And __4__ the associate risk of cancer in the digestive system may be more __5__ about a dietary problem—too much fat and a lack of fiber than a __6__ weight problem.The real concern, then, is not that we weigh too much, but　that we neither exercise enough or eat well. Exercise is necessary __7__ for strong bones and both heart and lung health. A balanced diet
' J; T3 A3 h3 T. z. l6 ^　　without a lot of fat can also help the body avoid many diseases.We should surely stop paying so much attention on weight. __8__ Simply being thin is not enough. It is actually hazardy if those who __9__ get(or already are) thin think they are automatically healthy and thus free from paying attention to their overall life-style. Thinness can be purely vainglory. __10__
　　1.overweighted改为overweight overweight本身就可以做形容词修饰people，不需要加ed。
" R; h4 W, Y2 I+ X! Q　　2.correlates后加with.Correlate应与with连用，表示“A与B有关联”。
% Y6 `& X4 S4 _' p9 t　　3.therefore改为however.从上下文来看，这里是转折而不是因果。
　　4.excessive改为excess.excess往往指数量上超过所需，多余。excessive 往往有不赞同，否定的含义在里面，另外，excessive除了可以表示数量以外还可以表示程度，表达抽象概念。比如After cooking fish, pour off the excess fat.The government says that local authority spending is excessive.
7 ]0 X9 l/ m9 g9 z　　5.associate 改为associated.associated 表示“关联的，相关的”。
0 Q8 B8 w1 X2 G' {! A　　6.about改为of.这里的意思是“与之相关的消化系统患癌症的危险实际上是饮食问题引起的，而非体重问题” ，about意思为“相关的”，这里应该为of，表性质。
$ m1 ]7 q5 `8 ?9 G　　7.or改为nor.neither应和nor连用表示两者皆否定，而not才和or连用。
! _, T: P; d7 b0 D1 ?　　8.on改为to
　　9.hazardy改为hazardous.hazard的形容词是hazardous而不是hazardy。
　　10.purely改为pure