怎样使英语专业考试写作句子多样化（2）

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　　增强英语语句表现力的有效方法
) [4 M) Y2 Q5 Z8 m　　一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
1 [6 `$ o& T- t% N  w　　1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：
, _& Z' l( @' b% c2 [　　Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
. E5 k4 u6 r! Q2 }　　Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
0 X# G; [; z/ _, C4 e　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定 语)
　　2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：
3 Q3 d7 y; f5 U2 d# D  @) S0 {　　1) Weak: The team members are good players.
) ]" w( O( f1 V& T　　Revision: The team members play well.
8 t% {+ C3 z+ |. E　　2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.
' v" ]$ T) I! _1 N　　Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
8 @+ V" @4 ~1 e( `, N- E/ W0 Q( |  v　　3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例 如：
　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.
8 O6 e& K) p. c- K　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
( }/ L! H$ w; h4 k　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
- i' x1 F- d/ k# R0 v　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.
　　二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
　　1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.
" C1 V* G$ Z7 v% T4 {　　Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
& L' u0 r5 Z. }! s& L　　2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.
　　Better: She compares prices and quality.
! O" i7 F" V4 K- l* m, T4 H　　三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
7 \* h  B+ G- `# h1 z0 R& d5 ^　　1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
# s* v# _, y5 P- p" }$ ], U　　Better: Charity has supported the organization.
+ a* K* n, ^/ b# R　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
( d8 z$ m& |) x$ k) p: W　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
　　四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
+ Y4 ~& o/ L$ \& ]6 F6 c: w　　1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
2 S. k; @( W! w4 ]" z; J8 N　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
4 l2 D4 A3 ^  Q! W' C　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
% ~1 _  l1 i" D% ^0 g　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
　　五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
　　1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
6 o4 d6 X# z4 z% V) \& }. m" j　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
　　2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
# d) W/ F  c4 q& U5 M: m- h　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.