商务英语考试：写作技巧（5）
9 N, |8 p c8 F A$ \5 L7 [8 Q. |(3)避免冗长的表达方式和不必要的重复(avoid wordy expressions &unnecessary repetition)
1 G, z# W0 [6 @ 请看下表中的两组例子，比较一下修改前与修改后的差别。
/ u1 B1 }4 {* A; h Wordy
) a# f b# c! J! o7 c$ ? Concise
5 v7 L& b8 `( ]8 L We would like to. A' ]) L* t* j9 ]
A long period of time
8 Y& k4 f X4 X$ L- ] I expected it to be9 t2 B% z' s: y$ \- p% c' S n
During the year of 1995
9 g9 `5 b% r7 k0 q! c& e For the development of
7 U3 P1 X* O: r Square in shape, W% s0 C2 e+ Q
During the time that
/ j* x; z/ v, ~( k' }' X4 k. d please3 v3 ]1 s2 N7 X* T. N8 Y
a long time
, I8 w/ D& s, y' V expected- N9 c/ ]3 J+ o, A* L
during 1995
6 ?. s6 |3 z7 e6 ` s for developing
; c: _- H! ?. P* A/ p square
" r( I2 K* ]. Q& [# T n while考试用书; m; O! Z# }1 I# o
(4)删改无关紧要的成份(Remove unneeded facts)
1 Z+ Z: A5 g' Q7 ^$ c 如果句中的某些成份被删除后不影响句子的原意，那么就应该毫不犹豫地把它们删改掉。如下面句子中的划线部分被删去后并不影响句子的原义：
/ d3 Y! m3 q, Z& Q It should be noted that this is the best we can do。. S) y# n6 a7 h4 Y n U2 j! Z3 c
(5)多使用主动语态的句子结构以明确表达意思
" {& R2 a5 ?$ ?% z; a, W- K! l 请比较下面两个句子:
& Y( k' D" t- M3 X Payment of their accounts will be made by Johnsons next week．
, r$ Y! U/ G* Z2 {: @% N Johnsons will pay their accounts next week． |
发表于 2012-8-14 18:47:57
