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</p> 比较下面三对句子： b6 a- U! m0 S' a( D* O6 b
A. They bought a bicycle in Beijing in a small shop which costs $ 25.00.
' C3 i' S: c* W; F& ]: r4 o J They bought a bicycle for $25.00 in a small shop in Beijing.
( U6 Z8 C, s3 o. j) U7 p B. He was warned not to drink water even in a restaurant which had not been boiled. h5 |: j7 r; t; V, h0 f
He was warned not to drink water which had not been boiled.8 D% E2 [. {4 M2 T; r: U
C. Those who work rapidly get ill in these conditions.
+ n) k9 U! w- U3 }. R8 T Those who work in these conditions rapidly get ill.
9 J( f1 k/ ^- C$ ^ (6) 避免在同一个句子中使用意义不同的同一个字。
; {7 L ~4 b: Z8 |8 T* X G We shall take a firm line with the firm．
5 F L6 v; R0 |. U7 t( P' h0 P We shall take a strong line with the film．
1 C' n& U% ^0 F0 z2 r( t r& R 3．简洁(Conciseness)
/ Z; A1 u' ~: `. @, B: j& K4 ?% C A. We have begun to export our machine to countries abroad.- F" o" x* @1 k( V& v" s2 H: E( k
We have begun to export our machines.3 ~ ^9 M: `; s9 x7 b! ^) |
B. In the event that you speak to Mr. Wood in regard to production, ask him to give consideration to the delivery schedule.7 m4 [$ K+ P/ p5 _) f
If you speak to Mr. Wood about production, ask him to consider the delivery schedule.2 ^; k$ @+ [! N1 [. D) s9 E
C .We require furniture which is of the new type.) w: t. V' U6 d7 S
We require new-type furniture.
" ]% G, u5 a2 ?2 D (1)使用简洁的语言(Use simple language)7 L; W I2 C1 Z# f1 L
尽量使用 避免使用7 S, e& z5 u* u _; h
please will you be good enough to
% C% ?7 _7 t8 v) q+ k+ Q- u7 w prefer express a preference for
" l( l! k: X; j5 s) s! m }/ n/ [; g because for the reason that
* `3 e# m6 G- R1 Y- j1 s; f) O- I (2) 少用陈词滥调(Omit trite expressions)& s' P6 B' a- `& M6 t
as the case may be/ J" }% z" R+ |6 O
it has come to my attention0 W9 x2 E w. \7 H' w) g$ e4 ~
at an early age, B$ m7 ~' {) H6 m3 s" f# E V" v
avail yourself of this opportunity
( y8 u |% d, O previous to5 {2 E2 I' t& c
crack of dawn' @6 e& z- t5 |9 B; V) g+ ]' G: n
pursuant to your request
3 ], }1 f3 Y# T' E2 z4 P take the liberty to
# e6 U1 h) }! l4 G( O, f- g! v& X due to the fact that2 e7 `$ E0 a0 h% V' V0 |1 F5 [
thanking you in advance
- A6 @% l3 q5 @7 l+ r enclosed herein
; W, s& A/ T+ P' Z" ]) H3 s this is to inform you
* @6 c6 {( l& Q1 Z$ Q0 y7 A8 ~ under separate cover, l$ C; ^/ V; q/ Y# L, d# v
with kindest regards
2 ~ G9 b' m2 ]9 ] I wish to state
+ f# K" G, [! Z (3) 避免冗长的表达方式和不必要的重复(avoid wordy expressions & unnecessary repetition)。$ ^+ k3 ~1 y: S/ L$ j
Wordy Concise O% s& K& x7 H# f% u
1. We would like to please. y8 P1 T! F( u8 ?$ x8 A: m
2. For the month of August for August
7 D& }; J! W. q `. G( }! F 3. Pursuant to the end of this week now6 h3 Q$ u2 Y. N+ J/ E! k U1 x4 z
4. A long period of time a long time8 k9 ^7 }) q( J3 _
5. At this time now
2 [$ T7 @) T0 @$ \3 ^" A! v) ] 6. Is at this time is3 K/ n1 W' v( M1 C% S4 e
7. The weight was higher than the weight was greater than
. r1 `" S4 c! _1 o' T' Z* H 8. I expected it to be expected0 W" O0 n) a0 D4 f" _
9. During the year of 1995 during 1995# J' k; _! z7 Y4 h! x
10. For the development of for developing
. ^, u- j1 l, Q8 | 11. In the city of Dallas in Dallas9 `4 c3 f" O9 Q: I+ D! N: M
12. The problem was that the car would not the car would not start 1 V. c! j( C# o8 Z1 L, U- v% b% I
start
. m8 H: S7 b* O3 l/ W* C, t 13. Square in shape square. {+ ~$ T4 z6 N( F$ d
14. in accordance with your request you requested
1 m* \! k* p1 Y$ g; I# @( F 15. Sign on the front of this form sign this form0 T8 ?! ]4 c" W+ }( F( i" R
16. During the time that while
1 @( m6 F3 F8 X7 W 17. Consensus of opinion we agree5 S# Y/ t4 ~ R
18. Remember the fact that remember
+ a! I" d& W- U+ v* X2 G- e' D# [4 @ 19, Held a meeting met
( M: G6 z/ I3 J% z 20. this is the situation at this time now
, _) Z$ A4 Q* k' g7 H0 o$ Q, ~7 Q% U (4)删改无关紧要的成份(Remove unneeded facts) # \; j( O, M+ H0 t F) {
A. It should be noted that this is the best we can do,
4 H" s- v8 @+ U4 H" A2 c' T4 e B. For your information we enclose a catalogue.7 i. I% o- t. S2 ?# C
C. Please be advised that we have received your invoice.
4 C. w0 i9 C& b J 1. as soon as possible by July 10
9 t% ~& e7 C( |* u& n$ k5 ?, H/ U1 g 2. as you indicated in your letter as you indicated. k" G( ?" J2 o3 p+ k
3. at all times always
& X2 H$ J0 b5 X% G 4. at this time now
! `4 Q: ~' x8 \7 _ 5. continue to utilize the old form until start using the new form on February
) b& l3 ]% D& a+ p8 } such time as the new form is available ) S8 \8 o' o1 j$ c+ R
6. despite the fact that despite' _# J% [) \) o( T( t& ?
7. for the month of April for April9 M. s) A# c! ^- a
8. for obvious reason that because
% E. c3 J8 s' e( S! e 9. I would ask that you please: N. y" x( G9 R
I0. in conjunction with with
4 ~% l/ Y6 q( Z- @ 11. in the mere recent past recently
" M+ g9 Q7 K/ T2 ~; U 12. in the unlikely event that if
) S8 F# \5 L+ G; t' Z 13. in the unlikely event that I am unable to if I am late, please delay the meeting
% |( w5 ^9 F& a9 R be on time, please delay the meeting' ?. A, Z; U& y8 H$ h
14. in view of the fact that because
4 T; [) d0 w2 ~8 [* c 15. it will be greatly appreciated if you please- h# n& H" [- ~6 c2 U5 F" @9 C
16. our production of the new product will production will begin on July 1% T& e, s2 `: x& W- t, c5 e. q" E
commence on July 1- A* h8 b: d6 ?! E1 ^4 k8 X, \
17. please be advised that we expect you to please review the contract
9 M' G# B3 E' u: ~8 n' t: g review the enclosed contract
% {) I5 u2 P7 L& K: [2 ~6 Q1 ]* E (5)多使用主动语态的句子结构以明确表达意思。
( T/ T5 g s, Z- K* H. S Payment of their accounts will be made by Johnsons next week．
! F5 X1 m& C# W C4 s: }5 E Johnsons will pay their accounts next week． |
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