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First of all, children can earn money from their jobs, although there isn’t too much, but they will keep their salary gingerliness. 5 _# D' r; R# ] 这里的gingerliness根本是不知所云。该句子还有以下问题:4 E$ ?2 I& i D9 e+ K6 e+ z
1)该作文题目是讲学生是否应该做兼职,因此children的出现就显得很莫名其妙;1 z* P- E7 [- u( j
2)although和but是不能连用的;( S* X# m7 D7 J$ p9 `/ e& n4 G: h
3)指代不明,they不知道是指代前面的什么;