GRE考试：issue官方范文(三)2

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　The world, as a whole, ignores them.  
- X, W0 Y8 H; `4 R2 G　　One would hope, however, that governments, perhaps through a strengthened U.N., could somehow be forced to realize that when the Earth reaches the critical mass of pollution, it may be too late to do anything about it.
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　　That would be a "common tragedy" indeed.
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　　This excellent response displays an in-depth analysis of the issue and superior facility with language.

　　While acknowledging that environmental problems are serious and of global dimensions, the essay explores the complexity of international cooperation.

! A( E6 |9 `7 S1 m! z$ B　　Such cooperation, the essay argues, runs into a variety of problems, and the writer offers persuasive examples to support that point:

' C: Z) O. r6 Y1 Y6 y% z　　-- the unwillingness of nations to "interfere" with other nations through political measures such as restriction of foreign aid

　　-- inadequate environmental regulations, which are caused both by "the differential impact of polluting activities" between countries and regions and by the difficulty of comparing the "long-term effects of polluting actitivities" with the more easily documented, short-term costs of reducing pollution.
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　　The essay distinguishes itself in part by its excellent organization.

" K/ n( G1 Q5 |; j　　The first paragraph analyzes the claim and announces the writer's position; the second and third paragraphs provide clear examples supporting that position.
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　　The skillful use of a quotation from a business person vividly illustrates the economic impact of pollution controls.
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　　The last two paragraphs bring a sense of closure to the essay by continuing the theme announced in the first paragraph -- that cooperation must wait until more dire circumstances produce the political will necessary to reduce pollution.

; V+ t# c/ e) b　　The essay exhibits superior control of grammar and syntax, with only minor errors.

　　Transitional phrases -- "because," "however," "for instance" -- help guide the reader through the argument.

' k, x; J# J7 a! w/ S' g) H7 l　　Also, effective sentence variety and the use of precise word choice help confirm the score of 6.

0 r, b0 ~- w3 {; Z　　5、At no other time then in our present time has the need for unity and togetherness been more necessary to the inhabitants on our planet.

* F1 u* _8 B8 p$ ^$ |. K. {2 I　　For many decades the motto has been one of waste and denial.

% _# S# G! Z9 @5 u0 k( n2 C　　The world is in a race - racing to become number one - racing to destroy the earth.