The greatest barrier in any situation is communication.
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If we communicate with each other and work together instead of apart results would be seen.
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Education is another great concern, especially in underdeveloped countries and third world nations.
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There is a lack of education in many of these countries.
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Education is the key to success.
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In summary I would like to emphasize the importance in unity and cooperation on global concerns such as the environment.
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0 h2 K" Z$ \% u; ~0 X2 z Also education is very important in making headway.
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I also believe the government should get more involved in these issues.: a- x, J# s! P7 u3 T1 q
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This essay presents and supports an adequate analysis of the issue.7 ^6 A# Q) \' r
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After stating the need for cooperation on the environment, the writer proposes several very specific remedies for environmental problems: recycling, emissions testing, research, education, and communication.- n* B. b( A: [6 ^% q6 i d
) P% a* { ~+ a; t- p. [4 U The detailed description of emissions testing is useful; however, the other remedies (recycling, research, etc.) are not developed fully or persuasively.+ y% n7 m3 k3 E. {7 ?
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In some areas the essay suffers from needless repetition.
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Paragraph six, for example, moves from education to communication and back to education.+ r4 O8 z- {4 s% e3 O1 h/ L
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The conclusion, moreover, adds little, merely repeating earlier statements.% s" p; {! L9 N6 m6 t6 H# R/ L: O& Y
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The control of grammar and usage is generally competent, but the sentences tend to be choppy.
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, s5 g5 t4 f5 o. z* u Although most of the ideas are stated clearly, the relationship between the ideas is not always made clear: "Also education is very important in making headway.( b+ ~! _! \# P7 }7 @$ e
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I also believe the government should get more involved in these issues." |